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This proves once again that FB people are my people. Years of looking for loopholes and strange wording make kin of us all.

About halfway done with the chapter where Jon learns about that :p

No idea if this is where you're going with it, but my mind immediately goes to - what happens when he uses a shower that turns itself off after a short time, at the school changing rooms, a swimming pool or the gym. If the shower switches itself off, how would Jon fulfil the 'I turn the shower off' bit to turn back.

FYI: For the remainder, I'm going to have Jon self-refer as April whenever female, with pronouns and all. Any time one of their forms is thinking about something they did as the other gender, it'll use those pronouns. That's the plan, at least. It is VERY easy to make mistakes with it.

Apparently, Jon picked up some secondhand trauma from Karyn's wish in the root. I was not expecting this to show up in this story that was supposed to be a light-hearted TF romp that I've been thinking about for 10 years, but I don't hate it.

Ooh this is interesting

I appreciate you. Without giving too much away, I do intend for this story to have a generally happy ending. Maybe not everything will be perfect, there will be some element of bittersweet. But I'm not going to leave anyone out in the cold on this story.

That said, I still have to drag our heroes through Mordor before they can toss the evil ring into the volcano. It will get better. But that doesn't mean bad things won't happen along the way.

Thank you for reading.

Justice for Karyn. She deserves better, and I really don’t want to see her hurt. I hope nothing else in the story ends up involving Biff—he’s consistently a jerk in every version, and the idea of him and Karyn together is something I absolutely can’t stand.

I also struggle when two characters who are deeply close get separated or lose each other for reasons outside their control; it triggers real anxiety for me. That’s why I’m so attached to Jon × Karyn and protective of their bond.

No offense meant—your story is great overall. Please keep going.

Intriguing

What ho? The beginnings of actual conscious communication between Karyn and Other Karyn within Karyn? Hmm... Could it even be the beginning of the end?

Justice for Jon. Karyn x Jon.

Work I can't help you with but this is the definition of informal so I wouldn't worry too much about grammar as long as you're understood. If you're really concerned, take what you're going to submit, have a free AI check it over. "Hey Grok, English isn't my first language and I want to make sure this is understandable. Would you please check this for grammar and spelling?" You're just using a tool to double check yourself like a spell check.

Maybe I’ll give it a try in a few weeks. Am busy with work related stuff and I have to brush up on my English grammar first. Cause it’s neither my first or second language

We'll have to do one from Sarah's POV. We're probably overdue for an outsider perspective. Maybe you'd want to write it up. =-)

It’s bit funny to see it from Sarah’s POV. Since from her perspective she turned a normal guy named Cassandra who is her bff/friend with Benefits into a Goth slut

I hadn't intended Cassandra, Zoe, or their mom to become futanari but it might happen due to future wishes.
And if you want to add to any of these Episodes I'd love to see what you come up with.
And you're right, the wish logic is there if you wanted to build on or alter the Episode with a 'whoops Zoe has a dick now and is freaking out' sort of thing.

Since Cassandra got bigger breasts thanks to Zoe’s wish, I thought that the wish may affect more of her anatomy since they have a futanari mom and Mikey also became a futa

Zoe and Cassandra don't have penises. Unless you can show where they might have gotten them, it is entirely possible I overlooked some bit of wishing logic.

Perhaps Sarah's wish gave her some of the original John's energy and she was able to share it.

Would that mean Cassandra also got a dick or is she now the only one who hasn’t got one?

Finally someone who knows futanari means that they a pussy too.

All I'll say for now is that the story isn't over yet...

I like that Jon changed back and isn't jock Jon anymore. But I don't really understand how Sarah had the power to change Jon back.

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Please! Ask away

Glad to see you writing again. I always like your takes on where a story should go.

I really like your story and I want to talk with you and our discussion is related to story mind can we talk?

Great story I have a question about your story Can I ask?

time will tell

Also hope Jon develops his relationships with his harem more. And im wondering when he does if he will use the editor to make them more accepting of Jon being in more relationships.

You read my mind

Hope we can see Jon make more use of the editor feature

Okay the end bit/joke got me really good, +2

You're afraid and you keep going, hoping that maybe beyond the door you can find something to break the spell, but you realize with terror that despite your efforts, you aren't changing back. You're still like this. You're still in that space. It occurs to you, in a wave of excited terror, that you might actually be stuck like this.

not dead! just a lazy and banged up author. hopefully will be back to updating soon!

I'll try to do that when there is a save point in the "game" Glad you are enjoying

Why not keep it going!

Wonderful! I like the addition of marching clothes, quote a funny visual, heh. And if you have the power to grant your own wishes, why not have some fun with it, hmm? ;)

I was brainstorming with chatGPT, and had it generate Jon's look at the end and it was so amazing I had to share.

The discussion after removing the pants was written by MrsCork in the original Jon's Wardrobe story

This is very fun! Well done! I look forward to more updates. I always like the story mechanism of 'reluctant master'

Oh man. Just decided to give this branch a thorough read through. I'm kinda upset that I did, because now, I NEED MORE!.

Starts and ends I do well, I stink at middles.

I really hope this story isn't dead, would love to see it continue

This is starting well!

Loving this storyline so far!

I can't wait to see more of this... Very well written so far!

Really enjoying this continuation.

Great to see a favourite branch revived in a new way. Look forward to seeing where you go with it.

I love MsCork's Jon's Wardrobe story, and I had an idea for a spinoff that really plays up grabbing things from other people and sort of mixing and matching aspects of them.

The story of cleaning Biff's room is actually a thing my Mom did with my Dad in High School! She describes it as sweet, my dad describes it as frustrating, and my Grandma was just happy his room was clean.

Maybe a little bit too meta, but when Jon saves the name of that save file should be te same as the chapter title (without the Gamer: part). But I really enjoy this branch and can't wait until Jon does something stupid (again) and makes a bigger change with his powers).